Venom mix 1 (constuctive crit pls)

[mrwilson]

Just working on this track at the mo.

if this works horray, i've finally managed to upload a track.

Any constructive critisism welcome.

Because my computer is gay, i've had to record stuff to audio or it all siezes up. So the arrangement is kind of stuck for now.

But you get the general idea.

there is a comedy bonus in there also (steve irwin)


http://wilson.dmusic.com/

[mrwilson]

i think you have to cut and paste the link in, when i press it, it just siezes.

[Dylan]

Working Stu i had no problem mate. Class Steve Urwin chop up!!!
Nice tune all round, crisp production not lost to much sound quality either.
Nice percusion, pads etc nothing sounds to out of place, have a nice pace to the overall track as well. You could mabye do with a bit more of a blatent hook in the track to keep it moving.
Nice roller though, got a good little mood running through the track. Bass fits to, drums still stay nice and fat when the bass drops.
Nice hats throughout, nothing to plain and boring keeps you interested. Thats about it for now mate, i think ive smoked to many rollies this morning as im about to whitie from smoking to much Golden Vergine!! In a bit

[corea]

Nice one mate. I like this deep "paddy" stuff, glad to see I'm not alone in this deep and chilled out stuff. :) The pads keep my interest and relax me at the same time, that is nice... What I would do with this tune (except finish it!!! :) ) is to try and put a nice summer lead melody (piano or acoustic guitar). Nothing agressive or pretentious, just something pleasant I can whistle in the street. Production-wize, the bass is nice and I can hear it well present in the sub-low end, but I would widen it's low freq. range as it sounds kinda weak on my B&W speakers (in headphones sounds sweet). Just a tiny bit for more overall presence. I would also lower a tiny tiny bit that clap/snare, and maybe make it another tiny bit shorter (or vary the length, one short, one long as it's now, and repeat, tt---ttaaa---tt---ttaaa). And maybe add another layer to it, put a punchy snare with some fadeout so it influences only the first part of the whole snare, and balance it's volume... this for the punchyness (do you use Battery? there it's fairly easy to do this)

Good job mate, you're on the right way. Waiting for the finished tune. :thumbs: :toke: :beer:

[mrwilson]

Nice one mate,

I'll get on the case.

Yeah I've just started using Battery and love it.

I just got some baad monitor headphones, so i'm gonna start to try panning stuff more.

it definatley does need more interesting things going on.

cheers for the crit, i'll have a listen to your new one tonight.:beer:

[corea]

Which monitor hp's you got?

Yes, my new one is still very new :) not much there, but give it a listen anyway. :beer:

[mrwilson]

I just got some Beyer 250's (headphones)

[Zyon Base]

oh dear me that steve irwin megamix is the funniest thing i've heard in ages. what a beauty.

masterpiece.

cut it to dub definitely.

[Zyon Base]

oh shit i forgot to actually review this track.

nice varied hats, the pads have got a cool nostalgic aphex-twinny ambient worksy feel to them. like the vocals too a lot.

i agree that it needs a definite hook line as the vocals are more textural than melodic.

can't hear the bass but then i've got shite speakers. would sound good with some punchy subs (ie. like photek - rings around saturn or aquasky - kauna)

very very nice liquid track.