Apprentice-Brits Abroad- Feedback please

[Tom-R]

click the link for direct mp3
http://zedstatic.cbc.ca/users/a/Ap23/files/2_havana.mp3
or for 56k modems this might be better
http://zed.cbc.ca/displayContent.do?item_id=47665&user=Ap23
just find the right tune under contributions and click on it then click on listen.
is it possible maybe to get some feedback on this tune:agree:
cheers.

[Zyon Base]

overall i like the sound all the frequencies are well represented.

not too keen on the first drop it seems to get a bit lost and needs a more definite build. plus after the drop there isn't much difference than before. maybe end the drop on a snare to kick in. if youre going to do the building bass-drum type build up youre expecting a heavy drop afterwards.

like the vocal snippets but some female vocals would go excellently over this track to help structure it.

i think work generally on structure, which would be helped by some kind of strong melody line (vocals preferably). plus more elements after the drops.

sorry if this sounds negative im really really feeling this track i just think it has the potential to be absolutley blinding.

[Tom-R]

everything you said is true tho mate, to be honest i rushed the composition just to give a basic feel to the tune and get some feedback on it plus the vocal sample sounds a bit lame cos i got fed up with trimming it down as the original tune has a varying speed it seems ( im also not too good with cutting up loops, only have the sample editor in logic) cheers tho for the feeback, its nice to finaly get some feedback from this site.

[mrwilson]

nice.

i like the little flute loop.
also like the way the beats come in early and then goes into little breakdown. When it drops the main beat is kind of unusal but i like it (kind of Hospital Vibe). Vocal sound great.

i like all the sounds chosen and the hook is good. very original sounding track. good work. kind of house vibe, but not the gay disco house vibe.

it's got really good variation all the way through to keep your interest.

it would be nice (maybe) to have some sampled live loop percussion or something come in later on in the track to compliment the beats.

it could even be a bit longer.

[kza]

check it,
this has a real big band sound to it, real nice vibe.
its overall sound sounds like john b.
nice phat bass, deep kicks, alright arrangement and wicked production.
could be a bit longer tho
nice one man